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First off, beautifully written. You've used the fixed form very well. There is a lot of imagery in this but it's not over baring. You've kept it simple and true. I believe it connects well with the reads, at least with me it did. It made me thank of my old playground. I don't really have anything to critique on this except for one small thing; In the last stanza, I thank It might be better it were spaced out like all the others. Other than that I have to say well done. I loved reading it. <:

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